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Choose a short paragraph or speaking answer you wrote yourself. Read it once and identify the main point. Rewrite the first sentence so that point is clear, then check whether each following sentence supports it. Share your revised version and one sentence about what you changed. You can do this exercise here without a diagnostic or Pro subscription.
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selin96
Small attempt:
First version: Taking the bus is good. There are lots of cars. Buses can carry many people.
Revised: Taking the bus could reduce traffic because one vehicle carries several people who might otherwise travel in separate cars.
Is the link clearer now, or does it still need an example?
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