PrepEx· Edited
Do you write first or read the sample essay first? I can compare vocabulary, but what if the sample uses totally different ideas?
What would you change in your paragraph without copying it?
Comments
ha_nguyen
Compare one body paragraph: where does the sample explain its point, and where does yours? Keep your own idea. Got a short pair we can look at?
3
amara07
Small practice pair:
First: 'Working from home benefits employees. It is good for them.'
Revised: 'Working from home can save employees the time they would spend commuting. They could use that time to rest or be with their family.'
Now it names a benefit and explains it, instead of just saying 'good'.
9 Reply
yasmin_f
There's a learner paragraph and peer rewrite here. The original lists location, transport and cost; the rewrite connects distance with travel and living costs.
Does it still need to say how those costs lead to choosing online study?
2 Reply